Frenzied heart urges
To free forever, helpless
Words cheat, locked inside.
To free forever, helpless
Words cheat, locked inside.
(Thanks to the amazing poets on Haiku Heights who helped me through this one, especially Leo, awalkinmyheart, vivinfrance and Tarun Mazumdar. I was probably using wrong source to calculate the syllables I used in my Haiku. But I guess this mistake made me realize how warm and generous each one of you are. I was overwhelmed by the response. Thanks all... : ) )
Prompt 147- lock
This is nice.. the same haiku as before, meaning spot on and syllables spot on :) Loved it. Thanks for re-entering it with corrections et.al.
ReplyDeleteTry to count the syllables yourself. Lesser errors then usually.. or you can use http://www.thefreedictionary.com for checking the words. they show them syllabically split there. :)
Happy haiku exploration. Cheers!
Thanks a lot for your guidance and support Leo
DeleteLovely haiku ~ knew you would bring it forth ~ thanks ^_^
ReplyDeleteLooks good. Well done. Thank you for the mention and keep up your positive spirit.
ReplyDeleteI believe learning is successful only with positive spirit so I shall do that ... thank You :)
Deleteimprovising always brings out the best and it did on yours too... :) loved ur effort and spirit :) great haiku :)
ReplyDeleteThank You Maharukh... :)
DeleteIt's awesome, you have magic in you for haiku!, lovely!
ReplyDeleteNicely rewoven ... means more this way!! :)
ReplyDeleteI use How Many Syllables for counting ... sometimes my fingers miscount as well! :)
Flaming Locks
Thanks beccagivens.. i can so relate
DeleteAwesome work!
ReplyDeleteThank you
DeleteLike this one too. :)
ReplyDeleteThank You :)
DeleteWhat tender sweet words. Beautiful writing.
ReplyDeletethank You :)
DeleteVery well written! :) Words are always the culprit!
ReplyDeleteFlavors of experience!